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On
Dreaming of an Old Lover
My
dream of you pulses me
underwater. Once immersed
I
can speak to you only with my hands.
Why
not tell me the truth now,
you
far flung ash, infusion for
spring rye cresting
on the fallow fields: what now
on the fallow fields: what now
left
to lose, or to be overheard
by
anyone left behind.
What
became of us
the
day you sent me away
to
the mountains,
their
dream-spell and
lavender immensity calling
to
the weeping child within,
The
hope they would shelter me
abrade
away passion--
you,
the farm with its rich
dark
soil, the coal-eyed, long-haired
daughters
all at my back.
What
severed us
against
our will,
forcing
the pretext of forgetfulness,
regrets
still burning
brightly
as a hatch
of
fireflies,
The
singular shadow our lovemaking
made
on the pale walls
of
midnight, moon clearing
the
gardens with her scythe.
copyright Jenne' R. Andrews 2012
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12 comments:
i like the 4th stanza the most
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Ah, this is lovely - sort of a miller's tale/Romeo and Juliet/ and more all rolled together. I love the hatch of fireflies and the last stanza (just beautiful), and the abrading of passion - great juxtaposition there. Longing throughout.
Your question very apt for mine--I am really a jokester you know, and post too fast perhaps--especially this kind of an overblogged weekend for me. Take care--k.
oy....that last stanza is great...the shadow of the lovemaking and the scythe in the garden play well into the seperation you speak of earlier...nicely told jenne
o. this poem is beautifully gothic jenne, you make me want to enter
this world, despite the sadness.
There may be an end to passion. But there's another beginning after that.
Really beautiful, heart-wrenching, Jenne. I especially like-
What became of us
the day you sent me away
to the mountains,
their dream-spell and
lavender immensity calling
to the weeping child within
Beautiful Jenne...I love the notion of only being able to speak with hands when submerged...
poetic juices runneth over. lovely.
"their dream-spell and
lavender immensity calling"
That is breathtaking.
Thank you so much for stopping by-- I'll return the great favor. xxxj
How wonderful to see your work shared on Real Toads. I am a long-time admirer of your style, and the unique perspective you give to your subjects, and this poem is no exception. I loved the second sentence in the first stanza - for its perfect balance with the first. You have a way of combining the abstract with the concrete which makes for brilliant writing.