tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post6828389719138328012..comments2023-07-20T13:36:04.197-06:00Comments on La Parola Vivace: New Poem: Homage to Sylvia PlathJenne' R. Andrews http://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-8993570963441587102011-02-09T12:46:52.502-07:002011-02-09T12:46:52.502-07:00Ami dearest-- I have to thank you for getting what...Ami dearest-- I have to thank you for getting what I tried to do here-- quite the challenge to aspire to Plath's assonance and the amazing lines you pinned-- Plath: No sea-change decks the sunken shank of bone / That chucks in backtrack of the wave<br /><br />I thought about decks-- she couldn't mean as in punches but more like strands or leaves on the sand, I think. Your comments and that you came back mean the whole world to me. Love, JJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-33716976052229943322011-02-09T08:47:43.682-07:002011-02-09T08:47:43.682-07:00Jen, I thought I'd let you know that I just ha...Jen, I thought I'd let you know that I just had to come back to this poem. I find it so utterly fascinating. To say it is a "tribute" is not quite enough--as it seems both a dialogue with Plath's poem and a love poem to Plath herself.<br /><br />This time I'm struck by the measured way your poem reflects Plath's use of sound--how deeply you drilled down into the "s" sound in particular.<br /><br />Plath: No sea-change decks the sunken shank of bone / That chucks in backtrack of the wave<br /><br />You: Wet and singing,<br />But no sea-change checks<br />The sighing storm<br />That unnerves a hungry wave<br /><br />You surged, stunning me <br />with your white crest <br />And then pulled back <br />to the monasteries of the sea<br /><br />Sea, sand--everything is the sighing, rushing sounds of the ocean.<br /><br />Anyway, I could go on. I love Plath's poetry so dearly--true genius, and you reflect that brilliance in this poem.Ami Mattisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12391930163467566669noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-13870316964738809172011-02-07T01:45:57.601-07:002011-02-07T01:45:57.601-07:00Thanks-- and Ami yes, the more I worked on this th...Thanks-- and Ami yes, the more I worked on this the more unpacking of Plath's line and the more I felt the need to drill down as far as I could within each image... thanks for your heartening words on this one especially! xxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-38674564986145081072011-02-06T14:18:51.649-07:002011-02-06T14:18:51.649-07:00I'm awe-struck, Jenne'! The lyrical comple...I'm awe-struck, Jenne'! The lyrical complexity of this is stunning. First, you've chosen an amazing passage by Plath. That lone grain of sand makes my throat cry. Then, to become the beachcomber is fascinating. I'm struck by the juxtaposition between the 3rd and 4th stanzas and the "sea leaves" and "seal." Lots of pearls ("bright confessions" upon your yearning tongue) here!Ami Mattisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12391930163467566669noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-63246568172187252192011-02-06T08:23:06.383-07:002011-02-06T08:23:06.383-07:00The sea offers you so many wonderful images that y...The sea offers you so many wonderful images that you use to great effect.<br /><br />I especially like the metaphor of the fractured shell; so apt for Plath.Maureenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-80628233731215725702011-02-06T02:46:43.841-07:002011-02-06T02:46:43.841-07:00Hi Kerry-- thanks a million. I can't get over...Hi Kerry-- thanks a million. I can't get over those lines of Plath's-- I'll check you out...xxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-55514772625785654702011-02-06T01:08:18.170-07:002011-02-06T01:08:18.170-07:00A wonderful tribute to Sylvia Plath. I love your d...A wonderful tribute to Sylvia Plath. I love your descriptions of the fractured girl upon the beach. I followed your link because I saw the picture of Venus Rising, and by a twist of fate I had also written a poem based on a painting of Venus. Serendipity. I'm glad it led me to your page this morning.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.com