tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post7486396895065414678..comments2023-07-20T13:36:04.197-06:00Comments on La Parola Vivace: Posting for DVerse Poetics ...Reworking of Myth/Fairy Tale....Jenne' R. Andrews http://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-61435548508679836272012-03-18T21:17:48.085-06:002012-03-18T21:17:48.085-06:00Jenne - brava! Wow...Jenne - brava! Wow...Mystic_Momhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00099062213372011260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-28228774689316334342012-03-18T19:55:28.585-06:002012-03-18T19:55:28.585-06:00Parts of this, Jen, broke my heart a little.
I...Parts of this, Jen, broke my heart a little.<br /><br />I'm not sure what to believe these days, either. Buddism seems to make a lot of sense, peace and inner calm the goal, we are made of love and have nothing to fear. Then Christianity as "The Way." <br /><br />You have only deepened the mystery for me in this.Jannie Funsterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11595786402510366043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-33107210735465691862012-03-18T18:56:31.144-06:002012-03-18T18:56:31.144-06:00Amazing work, Jen.Amazing work, Jen.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-87532214010621078752012-03-18T15:22:53.022-06:002012-03-18T15:22:53.022-06:00This is very bravely told, serenely and confidentl...This is very bravely told, serenely and confidently in its refelection on reality versus promise. I think the mythic features of the Christos have outweighed what I call the existential, thereby letting in such aberrations. Though that too, ultimately, hearkens to an aboriginal sinfulness, an idea quite out of fashion now.<br /><br />The appeal to a triumphalist Christ versus the Jesus who walked on sand and mountain makes for too much for fantasy, drawing away from reality. Your poem is expertly crafted, I thought, though I would want to trust your instincts since you're closer to it than I.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08784125345525784337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-51031222601058556482012-03-18T14:23:16.117-06:002012-03-18T14:23:16.117-06:00...I was afraid to write this and so I think perha......I was afraid to write this and so I think perhaps the lining reflects a fluctuation between feeling brave and holding back, perhaps my unconscious attempt to convey the tide between and among doubt, grief, faith...xjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-788493871849184532012-03-18T14:15:04.937-06:002012-03-18T14:15:04.937-06:00Thanks to each person/poet who took the time to re...Thanks to each person/poet who took the time to read and respond to this problematic poem. And so nice to hear from you, Dawn-- have missed you. Regarding lineation I know that I vary traditional breaks with enjambed lines and it seems always to come to down to wishing to convey either that I hear a brief pause, or a stop, or that I want at least for the following of the image to continue-- I think my approach is in transition, honestly and perhaps it's fair to say that in this draft, I'm focused more on unburdening myself of my meaning as Woolf puts it, to which the lines are somewhat incidental to but still of course part of the whole. I'll give it more thought as it's a very important question-- thanks! xxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-66920821309828602702012-03-18T11:33:10.399-06:002012-03-18T11:33:10.399-06:00Yes.. this is in the top drawer of poetry. Just br...Yes.. this is in the top drawer of poetry. Just brilliant in conception and flawlessly written. You pack a big punch.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-32616289768448095792012-03-18T10:49:06.336-06:002012-03-18T10:49:06.336-06:00Myth, of course, holds deep truth, which this poem...Myth, of course, holds deep truth, which this poem aims to reveal and free. Your imagery is so strong, beginning with "the priest's pallid hands" and ending with "every shroud of barbed wire". The sense of the hidden in your opening lines opens into conflagration that finally allows us to imagine what will rise from the ashes.Maureenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-10357953670003097372012-03-18T09:51:23.902-06:002012-03-18T09:51:23.902-06:00Brave poem. Such a wonderful metaphor at the end....Brave poem. Such a wonderful metaphor at the end. So interesting to see the thorned garden convert to barbed wire. "Shroud" of barbed wire especially poignant. K.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-67002509830039828692012-03-18T07:29:45.973-06:002012-03-18T07:29:45.973-06:00In my recent workshops with high school students, ...In my recent workshops with high school students, we've been talking a lot about the idiosyncrasies of line. I'm curious about your variable approach to enjambment. What's your thought process about lineation?Dawn Potterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07500960150846895633noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-78959150932705018752012-03-18T02:05:42.896-06:002012-03-18T02:05:42.896-06:00sometimes the suffering in the world can just over...sometimes the suffering in the world can just overwhelm us and i agree with bri..we need to get busy to do our small part to change things...even if we can't change as much as we would love toClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-36315677824941061162012-03-17T21:03:16.125-06:002012-03-17T21:03:16.125-06:00dang...nice...and apropo too for the times we are ...dang...nice...and apropo too for the times we are in...we do need to get busy and work out this world...i dont think we can wait around on divine intervention...and i don't know if waiting for the mythical quick exit right before the crap hits the fan either...smiles.Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-44997646201308866122012-03-17T20:12:36.650-06:002012-03-17T20:12:36.650-06:00Wow, Jenne... I'm speechless.Wow, Jenne... I'm speechless.Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.com