tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post3596994212690260448..comments2023-07-20T13:36:04.197-06:00Comments on La Parola Vivace: New Poem: Rilke Variation: NachtJenne' R. Andrews http://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-20995083339848384322011-12-27T09:25:18.803-07:002011-12-27T09:25:18.803-07:00Oh my, that's some darkness! Beautifully writt...Oh my, that's some darkness! Beautifully written. It feels as though its imagery slips through the eras, from kings and queens, spun gold, and regrets about a horse (one of my favourite images), to the contemporary sunken car and the language of letting go. Throughout, the darkenings of the earth recur, in images of rain, aching bones (another favourite), dark water, and silt. The role that nature plays here is interesting, sometimes mirroring the moods of the human/cultural, sometimes a respite from them. The wound-to-wound image at the end is amazing, but I am not sure I could see night-as-wound coming? It felt more like night-as-Tarot High Priestess (if I can go Tarot for a sec).<br /><br />On another topic: thank you for your support these last several months! I always look forward to reading your poems and appreciate your comments on my work! Hope your 2012 holds all that's good!Kathy Bischopinghttp://drinkthenewwine.blogspot.com/2011/11/blood-bird-and-stone.htmlnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-25794930176336223772011-12-26T14:47:29.634-07:002011-12-26T14:47:29.634-07:00No, No, don't worry. I feel like I can hardly...No, No, don't worry. I feel like I can hardly sit up straight. (That's as much from doing laundry as Christmas! Ha!) K.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-65654637591659035812011-12-26T13:27:27.771-07:002011-12-26T13:27:27.771-07:00well fine tuned lines, wow.
keep sharing.well fine tuned lines, wow.<br />keep sharing.Bluebell Books Twitter Clubhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02346482636849975765noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-13519146829524724072011-12-26T10:59:06.814-07:002011-12-26T10:59:06.814-07:00Thanks to each of you-- promise I will get to you-...Thanks to each of you-- promise I will get to you-- Christmas "jet lag." xxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-19271473041489881152011-12-26T08:09:26.497-07:002011-12-26T08:09:26.497-07:00Don't see my comment--hope it made it. I also...Don't see my comment--hope it made it. I also love the "relief from ourselves" line. Beautiful. K.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-55000522779046615082011-12-26T08:08:03.034-07:002011-12-26T08:08:03.034-07:00Came back to this again--I thought I'd comment...Came back to this again--I thought I'd commented a couple of days ago but I think I was on iPad or iPhone and it didn't take. A lovely poem for night-I especially like the middle section--the regrets and the bones (the marriage), though the end of course is very beautiful as well the coral and the letter and the letting go and the wounds. I found the Kings and Queens a bit distracting--I'm being frank because I think it's pretty much a perfect poem!--I wasn't sure of that connection, yet it did flow through it. <br /><br />You have a wonderful gift. I hope you enjoyed your Christmas. Sorry I didn't get my earlier comment posted in a timely way. These little devices are terrific but don't really do quite everything. <br /><br />Best of luck with your wonderful verse. K.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-599953369188792732011-12-26T08:08:02.147-07:002011-12-26T08:08:02.147-07:00Came back to this again--I thought I'd comment...Came back to this again--I thought I'd commented a couple of days ago but I think I was on iPad or iPhone and it didn't take. A lovely poem for night-I especially like the middle section--the regrets and the bones (the marriage), though the end of course is very beautiful as well the coral and the letter and the letting go and the wounds. I found the Kings and Queens a bit distracting--I'm being frank because I think it's pretty much a perfect poem!--I wasn't sure of that connection, yet it did flow through it. <br /><br />You have a wonderful gift. I hope you enjoyed your Christmas. Sorry I didn't get my earlier comment posted in a timely way. These little devices are terrific but don't really do quite everything. <br /><br />Best of luck with your wonderful verse. K.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-31293290712811940092011-12-25T01:03:29.469-07:002011-12-25T01:03:29.469-07:00Excellent job. Stanza three in it's entirety ...Excellent job. Stanza three in it's entirety stands out to me along with some wonderful individual lines in I and II. Great write. Thanks for sharing and Merry ChristmasAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05885047796180529498noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-19749172977110674822011-12-24T16:08:19.947-07:002011-12-24T16:08:19.947-07:00joined wound to wound...wow..great closure..your i...joined wound to wound...wow..great closure..your imagery never fails to impress and surprise jenne...wishing you a wonderful christmas timeClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-40250988844407829612011-12-24T15:57:26.438-07:002011-12-24T15:57:26.438-07:00we are joined wound to wound, very deep. :)we are joined wound to wound, very deep. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-42296201001594889162011-12-24T13:34:10.541-07:002011-12-24T13:34:10.541-07:00Oh, so very touching Jenne and a reminder to live ...Oh, so very touching Jenne and a reminder to live in the present, which is a gift.Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-35141344368552171642011-12-24T13:27:11.232-07:002011-12-24T13:27:11.232-07:00joined wound to wound...nice close...some great li...joined wound to wound...nice close...some great lines through out as well...merry christmas jenne....Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-69800284599833017692011-12-23T04:36:16.004-07:002011-12-23T04:36:16.004-07:00These lines particularly stand out, perhaps becaus...These lines particularly stand out, perhaps because of that unexpected word "Misgiving": "Night eases us out of the rain of / Misgiving, and absolves our fear." <br /><br />I also like "the spun gold / Of relief from ourselves" and also your use, as always, of imagery from nature. The "empty beaver dams" speaks to alone-ness.<br /><br />How that Rilke quotation re-sounds in your last stanza is also noteworthy.<br /><br />Wishing you a peaceful holiday and much writing success in the new year.Maureenhttp://writingwithoutpaper.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-80945488265334814672011-12-22T23:30:13.389-07:002011-12-22T23:30:13.389-07:00The detailing makes me yearn all the more to go ba...The detailing makes me yearn all the more to go back to the world that was complete and light hearted. <br />Loved the ending: how we all are connected, wound by wound. Beautiful.Monikahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15844893934428524824noreply@blogger.com