tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post268965276025584902..comments2023-07-20T13:36:04.197-06:00Comments on La Parola Vivace: New Poem, On Meaning/Being....Jenne' R. Andrews http://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-70463557426692519832011-06-09T16:14:26.243-06:002011-06-09T16:14:26.243-06:00What a fabulous comment, Janice-- I tried to find ...What a fabulous comment, Janice-- I tried to find your blog, but? Thank you so very much! xxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-25347449742449607152011-06-09T07:25:00.045-06:002011-06-09T07:25:00.045-06:00dear jenne,
realizing you may never find this com...dear jenne,<br /><br />realizing you may never find this comment i apologize for being late, yet i am still grateful to have found your poem as it is stunning and beautifully expressed...it stirs ones emotions, it ponders, it seeks resolve, it sees a world in trouble and weeps for the flowers knowing "no one can tear the petals off and not know he is destroying a flower leaving her asunder, no one can return from ash as a full blown rose"...i've read this many times and with each contemplation i see the levels of meaning your words take on and i feel a great sense of loss...<br /><br />water is healing... as you say to return to our true element while "the restless mouth was here" asking questions amid the rallying of birds on every hand- little flag- wearing nationalists in their humid fervor"...perhaps in all the babbling our mouths are searching for a better way, and you've been lead to river "gorgeously defeated" and alas, "wordless"...<br /><br />i sure wish that with all the babbling i do, that it led me to creating a poem such as yours...one in which the more i read it, the more i feel your desperation to see the flowers unharmed...to see our lives, our hearts, most importantly our love prevail...<br /><br />a beautiful, profound and brilliantly expressed poem...<br /><br />sincerely,Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-34216012799182296792011-06-09T03:12:43.390-06:002011-06-09T03:12:43.390-06:00Thank you thank you, Maureen-- I agree with you a...Thank you thank you, Maureen-- I agree with you and appreciate your comprehension so much of what I was trying to do here. I was quite tired when I put this up, so made a few mistakes. Thank you too to Mama Zen. xjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-30247870744455538362011-06-08T20:28:35.992-06:002011-06-08T20:28:35.992-06:00I like the dual meanings of "Notes" and,...I like the dual meanings of "Notes" and, via its sound, "refracting pane". Strong opening with the image of collision with glass, the contrast of seeing through what should be clear but not really seeing; something of this also gets picked up in the images of "sky's river" and water, clarity and purification. The "babbling petals" bring to mind gossips, or a kind of Greek chorus, nicely relating to the insistence conveyed by the verbs become, fill, enter, enter, eat in the 4th stanza, which flows into "one bite from each / Your signature" and then opens out in "the day grew". "Of birds from every hand - little flags of love and hunger" is lovely. The "throw in the towel" seems a little jarring given the poem's overall lyricism. (Perhaps "Why not step through / give your body to water"?) I also like "ourselves spilling / beyond the need...." That final "and wordless" after all the babbling, swiveling, tearing, destroying and other active noisy words is nice, also because it relates back to last notes.Maureenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-487059350883726456.post-64568277556233962662011-06-08T19:23:05.511-06:002011-06-08T19:23:05.511-06:00Beautifully written.Beautifully written.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.com